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    dots Submission Name: The Rapture (Betrayed Me Part 3)dots
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    Author: TwistedMinded
    ASL Info:    23/m/San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 82/109/32
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1102
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    and make sure to check out "Betrayed" and "lost" to get a better understanding


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    dotsThe Rapture (Betrayed Me Part 3)dots
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    Let the truth be told Jesus
    You take pride praying on the weak
    People suffering hard dying from disease
    Praying your name but you show them nothing but false hope
    And take credit for a doctorís miracle work
    You have no shame you act like the whole world
    Owes you for your crucifixion
    You donít even know my name
    So as far as I know we are even
    I donít need your love now I know Iíve been alone from the start
    You took my princess away you rip her straight from my heart
    You will never be forgiven
    I will never step a foot in your house ass long ass im living
    The truth your people donít even trust you
    Sunday mourning they go to confess Monday afternoon theyíre back at it again
    Serving the demon seems like the devil has the upper hand
    So whatís your meaning of being around?
    The devil offers me guaranteeís while you keep on putting me down
    It must be killing you piece by piece slowly ripping you apart
    See now you know how I feel but this is just the start
    You have awaken a beast soon Iíll be having you begging for mercy on your knees
    Prepare thee-my rapture is coming im just telling the truth
    So take care of my princess mathafucka before I come for you.




    Submitted on 2007-05-02 02:16:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You feel the same as I do. I hate God, and Jesus. Thats why I am working on a poem called "Jesus Who?" so i think you would enjoy that. One thing, 'as' is not 'ass' you ass. lol...
    Good writing, and I hope to see more like this soon. Post more, your good.

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow
    Perty awesome..
    You're right, I do like it
    Keep up the writing.
    -Kimmi
    | Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by Childe-Wrote | [ Reply to This ]


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