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    dots Submission Name: Acorn Capdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 695
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Inspired by actual events in nature - no acorn or cap was harmed in the telling of this story

    Good to be goofy and lighthearted!

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    dotsAcorn Capdots

    Little acorn cap
    fallen to my lap
    how lost you seem to be
    as you roll onto my knee
    searching for your nut
    as you were it's only hut
    and protection
    in this life

    "Oh, how alone
    and full of strife!"

    "What a savage
    world of beasts;
    Birds to have
    you as their feasts!"

    Cries the cap, aloud
    to acorn
    But nestled to the earth,
    already born
    is the acorn
    to the tree

    Submitted on 2007-05-02 11:59:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A light hearted poem indeed and it's good to walk in the world. I like the style you used early in the poem. I generally hate rhyme at the end of every line but I though it work well and gave the piece a playful quality. your use of hut was clever and for a minute I had to think about it but I just got off work so I'm tired. I think the piece loses that playfulness as the rhyme becomes more sparse. I like what you said in the ending but I think the way you said it could use so reworking. I realize not all poetry has to rhyme I seldom use perfect rhyme but I like your use of it here and I think the piece would have a more unified feel if the rhyme was more consistent. Anyway have a blessed day. G'night.
    | Posted on 2007-06-11 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha, this is such a cute little piece!

    Personal opinion (feel free to ignore): maybe you could space out the lines/stanzas more evenly, each couplet a rhyme. Or something.

    Anyway, a very light-hearted poem!
    | Posted on 2007-05-31 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      From little acorns, mighty oak trees grow. Your ode to the acorn is very good indeed. Well done mother of all acorns.

    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really good piece. i love it. i don't know what else to say.

    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good and I do believe this write turned out a lot deeper then what your first intention was
    To me you are showing the reader how important nature nature is to a beautiful and succesful life
    I believe it is truly sad how many humans take natures beauty for granted
    I really enjoyed this
    I believe this will open up some eyes to the true beauty of nature
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
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    | Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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