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    dots Submission Name: Amica-centric Consequencesdots
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    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 95
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 733



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       Just a sonnet about something. not that great.


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    dotsAmica-centric Consequencesdots
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    Alas, my love, you tear my tender heart,
    And now I fall to pieces in your arms.
    You hold me close but still I fall apart,
    It's hard because you've been here from the start.

    As I lay here, you're in my every thought
    And of our close relation I'm distraught
    My heart, my life, and soul your beauty bought
    Now this is my cry: Forget me not!

    Have you forgotten all the things we were?
    Or was it all just me? I'm not quite sure.
    Still, either way this pain is hard to cure.

    I hope that maybe someday this will end
    And maybe someday all my wounds will mend
    I feel as though I lost my closest friend.




    Submitted on 2007-05-02 17:46:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have to love the bad comments. I can relate to losing a lover and consequently a friend. I like how you use a gender-role reversal in the second line. Most people don't think that males would "fall to pieces in your arms". I have to admit that the last two stanzas are my favorite. To me they lay bare how you truly feel. People don't ask why things went wrong, instead they focus on how much it hurts right now. Good write. Ciao.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]



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