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Whoopy Me! Shut the F*** Up!

Author: rawpot
ASL Info:    24/M/India
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Words: 94
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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Whoopy Me! Shut the F*** Up!

Dude You are sick!
What the hell is wrong with you?
I will Kill you!

Can I..

Thoughts flowing in and out as,
Crowded halls has noises filtered in,

Some one trying to sing,
Some crap, save the world....

Who knows and cares to.

I am sick and cynical about all things in my life,
Will I be called a loser?

Um, or if I where to remain positive,
Does it make it any better?

What the hell, I am just what I am...

Submitted on 2007-05-03 05:48:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ap·a·thet·ic - having or showing little or no feeling or emotion.

I think that there is a lot of emotion and truth for that matter. So many people are trying to appease everyone in this [censored]ed up merry go round we call life, that they never really stop to see they are only feeding the machine more quarters. If anything, this poem is a mirror image of why most real people in life, the ones that are worn down to pure cynicism due to too many monkeys throwing [censored] into their cheerios, are eventually going to be the ones standing in the back saying I told you so. Good poem, not that I care.
| Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]
  one word: apathetic.

and not just this peice but many of yours. but at least you don't deny it.
| Posted on 2007-06-16 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem reminds me of a high school situations with lots of people, doing their own [censored], and trying not to give into the peer pressure... Overall I like it alot, has a very angry touch to it and subsides towards the end. Keep up the great writting.

| Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]

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