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Painful Love


Author: Lavender
ASL Info:    20/F/USA
Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 101 /125 /59
Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I love you.


Painful Love



Sitting silently in my seat
I shudder when you look at me
It's not that I'm scared; no, no, not that
It's just... I'm the one you're looking at
Your dark brown eyes pierce my heart as they stare
Unknowing to what is truly there
The way I feel when you're around
I do not dare to make a sound
For fear of words that I might speak
Words that I don't want to leak
Through my lips, though it hurts me inside
I do not want this love to die
So I'll keep it to myself
But will keeping all this help?
This agony that I feel
Can it really, truly be real?
I hope that I can make it through all of
These things that I feel: this painful love.




Submitted on 2007-05-03 10:09:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Love. The cruelest of all human emotions!

This piece was excellent, though I would have loved to read more of it... it did suffice...

It brings to mind the film The Moulin Rouge and a quote from that film:
"The hardest thing, you'll ever learn, is to love, and be loved, in return"

But this was a very excellent write, I could almost feel the brown eyes piercing into me...

Take care,
*~ Mist ~*
| Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by PrincessDoom13 | [ Reply to This ]


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