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    dots Submission Name: Painful Lovedots
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    Author: Lavender
    ASL Info:    20/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 101/125/59
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 728
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    Description:
       I love you.


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    dotsPainful Lovedots
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    Sitting silently in my seat
    I shudder when you look at me
    It's not that I'm scared; no, no, not that
    It's just... I'm the one you're looking at
    Your dark brown eyes pierce my heart as they stare
    Unknowing to what is truly there
    The way I feel when you're around
    I do not dare to make a sound
    For fear of words that I might speak
    Words that I don't want to leak
    Through my lips, though it hurts me inside
    I do not want this love to die
    So I'll keep it to myself
    But will keeping all this help?
    This agony that I feel
    Can it really, truly be real?
    I hope that I can make it through all of
    These things that I feel: this painful love.




    Submitted on 2007-05-03 10:09:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love. The cruelest of all human emotions!

    This piece was excellent, though I would have loved to read more of it... it did suffice...

    It brings to mind the film The Moulin Rouge and a quote from that film:
    "The hardest thing, you'll ever learn, is to love, and be loved, in return"

    But this was a very excellent write, I could almost feel the brown eyes piercing into me...

    Take care,
    *~ Mist ~*
    | Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by PrincessDoom13 | [ Reply to This ]


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