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Lovely Day

Author: Lavender
ASL Info:    20/F/USA
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Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Lovely Day

When I close my eyes,
All I can think about is you.
While the sun shines,
I look at the sky that's blue.
And I think to myself,
'We could be like the sun and the sky,
Burning bright with compassion,
And blue when we sigh.
On a sunny day,
When the sky is clear
I'll pull you close.
You, whom I hold so dear.'
I truly hope
That this is the way.
If it is, then it reallly is
A lovely day.

Submitted on 2007-05-03 10:13:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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