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    dots Submission Name: Betterdots

    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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       This work was kind of inspired by another writer on this site. I feel like me and her are going through the exact same thing of being scared to death that we're going to through our whole lives and never feel the same kind of love we felt for someone else. And if we never do...how fair is it to live and pretend like we did? No one wants to live unsatisfied...but what if we're not given a chance?

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    "There is no past tense when it comes to love. It's either you do, or you never did."

    Staring into his deep, brown eyes,
    The beautiful blueness of yours
    Return my stare.
    He says my name,
    Like he needs me more than anyone.
    But the echo of your voice,
    Gently whispering to me deep into the night,
    Has never left my mind.
    He holds my body with the most tenderness of love,
    But I've never been weakened by that touch,
    As I was forever changed,
    The day your hand found mine.

    How lucky I am to have found this man,
    And yet I haven't smiled even once...
    Not in THAT way anyway.
    This life and this love,
    Is anything but fair to us both.
    I can't wholly be with him,
    When everything I am,
    Still remains with you.
    I can't live this life,
    In complete denial,
    Of what I KNOW to be true.
    What good is moving on,
    When I'm forced to live behind this facade
    Of pretending I don't love you anymore.
    What good is living this life,
    But worst of all,

    It's not that I don't love him,
    I just love you more.
    It's not that he's not anything,
    You're just my everything.
    And it's not that he's not good,
    I just know I can do better.

    Submitted on 2007-05-03 16:16:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Then quit stringing them both along and go out and practice what you preach...do better.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Ur.Poems.Suck | [ Reply to This ]
      Well written, very well done. The ironic side of the so called love. You love him but you love another more. And the fact that you're going to have to choose is always the most frustrating part of it. As you well put, it will make you 'unhappy'.
    Thankfully, "love" comes around more than once. And although that person may mean everything for a time, many times that feeling fades. If this wasn't the case, why have there been divorces?

    Very well written, and I wish you the best of luck in finding satisfaction in your situation and quest to hold on to love.
    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by djtswing | [ Reply to This ]

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