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    dots Submission Name: The Dishwasherdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 230/384/131
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Description:
       Double Dactyl poem. A dactyl is three syllables in the pattern of stress, unstress, unstress. The Double Dactyl poem is two dactyls per line, two stanzas, rhyme meter of aabcddec. The fourth and eighth lines have one dactyl plus another stress.

    I took a bit of artistic license and made the fifth and sixth lines have internal rhyme. Enjoy.


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    dotsThe Dishwasherdots
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    Anabelle Washington,
    wonderful washwoman,
    dish-washed and pot-washed her
    life down the drain.

    Fingers were pruny from
    years of long duty and,
    crazed, she subjected the
    plates to the rain.




    Submitted on 2007-05-03 18:49:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      AAAAAAAAH!

    I was a dishwasher for about a month and a half. It is the most unforgiving job. No one cares about you.

    "Oh, just give it to the dishwasher. He'll clean it."

    You feel like the filth that is caked onto pots and pans, plates, cutlery. Everything is so wet, so so wet.

    It gives me nightmares.

    Now, onto your poem.

    I had never heard of a dactyl before. I couldn't really even see the stress/unstress stuff. I'm not that crazy about my English. "Where does the stress go? Into my soul."

    The word "crazed" is perfect. That job makes you go crazy. I was already crazy before I started that job, so you should've seen how bad I got. Everyone thought the dishwasher was hopped up on goofballs. Mmm, goofballs.

    And then the line about her life "being washed down the drain". VERY Ironic and VERY fitting. Being a dishwasher is to have no life. No, seriously, it makes you feel like you are the undead or something.

    Were you ever a dishwasher? Cause you really seem to know what you are talking about in this poem.

    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      Sing-song. I read this again and again just to get the feel. Although I usually care more about meaning of poetry, rather than the rhythm or the sound of reading it out, I think you just proved to me why sound is also very important as well.
    The dactyl is a form I haven't seen much on this site (and to be honest I'm not going to experiment with it either) and so I was rather surprised to see it here..but it's a very useful literary device! Perhaps because of the two unstressed syllables. Someone get me a proper drumroll.
    Anyhow no point writing ten pages explaining what happens next.
    Catchy. I'll keep this one in my head.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      haha its cute, short. And the format is definitly interesting. I can't really say much about it because I am not too familiar with the style and its quite short. But anyways, good job.
    -Randee
    | Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
      Well written. Interesting format used, nice to see something more than aabb or abab type formats of writing. Great job, and quite an odd thing to write about I must say.
    ~Dan
    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by djtswing | [ Reply to This ]


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