[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: trial and erosdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 558
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 733


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotstrial and erosdots

    i can hardly remember the future
    the air of water
    the tough magic of clouds
    settling into the earth
    the piano keys floating up
    to greet us

    are you happy, sad, not happy?


    and where are you?

    i'm here
    on the levee
    by the 10 years
    since i've
    seen you

    my cigarette is always lit

    the cold uneven music presses
    my wet face into wet glass

    i'm waiting for you to love me
    like water

    glyphs of ochre and goodbyes
    trail on the ground

    Submitted on 2007-05-03 21:45:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      oh how cruel she must be to torment a soul so beautiful as thous. hath she no heart at all. that poor temtrest to bring the mighty to their knees with her wicked sirens song.
    "my cigarette is always lit

    the cold uneven music presses
    my wet face into wet glass

    i'm waiting for you to love me
    like water" these lines touched me. like something stirring under my skin i feel like i know those words. my heart is with you

    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Push written by JanePlane
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Linger written by saartha
    Summer written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    AI written by poetotoe
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Bond written by saartha
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    True Death written by layDsayD
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Fasade written by jackz
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]