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    dots Submission Name: trial and erosdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 562
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    dotstrial and erosdots
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    i can hardly remember the future
    the air of water
    the tough magic of clouds
    settling into the earth
    the piano keys floating up
    to greet us

    are you happy, sad, not happy?

    i
    see
    ships
    lounge
    by

    and where are you?

    i'm here
    on the levee
    kipnapped
    by the 10 years
    since i've
    seen you

    my cigarette is always lit

    the cold uneven music presses
    my wet face into wet glass

    i'm waiting for you to love me
    like water

    glyphs of ochre and goodbyes
    trail on the ground




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      oh how cruel she must be to torment a soul so beautiful as thous. hath she no heart at all. that poor temtrest to bring the mighty to their knees with her wicked sirens song.
    "my cigarette is always lit

    the cold uneven music presses
    my wet face into wet glass

    i'm waiting for you to love me
    like water" these lines touched me. like something stirring under my skin i feel like i know those words. my heart is with you

    shadow
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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