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Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 70
Class/Type: Poetry /
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Your words are silent
& I can't feel my heart beat
I've been frozen cold
lying on the floor
& I'm a tick of the clock
away from death
Doesn't anybody care?
Won't somebdoy come save me?
Or try to stop me?
In the end
It's all about you
But I'd run a mile
In hope to find you
I'd do anything, anything, anything
and you know it's true

Submitted on 2007-05-03 22:33:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Aww an honestly sad poem. Somehow this reminds of Bella and Edward from New Moon (when he said he didn't want her and she shut down..and yeah...I'll stop rambling) ... But really, the poems filled with emotion, which is a really really good thing. It's nice to read a clean poem like this. Now for my advice: Think it through, if he hurt you, then you don't want him! People you love and love you back won't hurt you that bad!
| Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
  Aww, this poem makes me so sad!!! I have been so depressed like that before, and what really helps me is to think of some good memories or whatever. I've actually been through something similar to this. But, that's all I have to say!
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| Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]

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