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    dots Submission Name: A Sleepdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Sleepdots
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    I wish I could always be asleep.
    I don't enjoy the concrete world.
    I prefer dream colors and shapes,
    the postmodern plots,
    the electric blue swirls
    I see when I close my eyes.
    The control and the lack of control
    of being at the mercy
    of my own mind.






    Submitted on 2004-02-02 06:38:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "the control and the lack of control/ of being at the mercy/ of my own mind"

    sometimes we are such control freaks...we think it is safer...but really it isn't..because if we are too careful, our mind will waste away to nothing, it will die...but if we let it do its thing, let it wander...there will be discovery and there will be life.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      hhmmmm...very interesting. being at the mercy of your own mind - I like that. I can also relate to this feeling. Well done.
    | Posted on 2004-02-02 00:00:00 | by oneLdamnit | [ Reply to This ]
      extrememely well written... i like the "the control and lack of control"... taking this to the end. Would like to have seen this extended a little.... very nice write
    | Posted on 2004-02-02 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]


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