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    dots Submission Name: Thank you... (revised)dots

    Author: pixie_007
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 45/77/63
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       I wrote this for a friend of mine,his mom passed in 2003 but it still hurts like it was yesterday. I may not know her or much bout how it was but I tried... She isn't here but I want to thank her for everything that he is today,she did the best job in the world because E,my world would be just another bit of grey matter had I not met you... Thank you Maria.

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    His beautiful brown eyes,
    His breathtaking smile,
    His wonderful laughter,
    His amazing charm,
    Even his anger...

    You gave him life and let him live it,
    You showed him how and you guided him through it,
    your departure left him broken,torn in two
    but I want to thank you...

    His silly sense of humour,
    His captivating voice,
    His awesome personality,
    His loving arms,
    Along with his tears...

    You scolded him many a time in his life,
    You disciplined him and did so with much love and care,
    When you left this world it ripped him open,
    but I want to thank you...

    His complete loyalty,
    His true sincerity,
    His honorable word,
    His unending love,
    Even his flaws...

    You held his world together,
    You were his world and everything it contained within,
    The day you left his world fell apart...

    I see it in his eyes,
    in the tears that fall to the floor,
    its been years without you by his side,
    and he may not think of it in that way,
    but were you here,you would have been proud...

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