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    dots Submission Name: Paindots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 677
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 835



    Description:
       To a person no longer of importance in my life.


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    dotsPaindots
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    I hate the pain you made me feel.
    The sad ideas you placed in my mind.
    the hurtful memories that linger in my heart.

    happiness is no longer there.
    It is buried beneth tears.
    Hidden with fake smiles.

    I enjoy the idea of pain.
    After all it is felt.
    With out it I'd be numb.

    I wish, for once, happiness would come.
    Instead of tears of sadness, those of joy,
    Would come from my eyes covering my face.

    Just the idea of me being happy.
    Why does it fill you with such rage?
    You should be happy for me, but no.

    You want for me to stay alone.
    To remain captured in this cage.
    Here's a news flash...

    Not going to happen.
    So move on.
    Get over it.




    Submitted on 2007-05-04 12:00:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like your poem...the emotion expressed and how u expressed it..I can relate 2 it alot..nothing seems 2 hurt quite the same as heartache.Thanks I liked it. -L
    | Posted on 2007-11-22 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Toker | [ Reply to This ]
      I Love this one alot ... It reminds me with stuff i write such as "fake smiles"... n "enjoy the pain "... it's well done.. thoughts are well organized ... feeling well expressed ... and you ended it in an awsome way !!
    | Posted on 2007-11-13 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot.
    It's very well written, and it flows amazingly.
    A lot of people can relate, and I can.
    Keep up the good work darling.
    :]
    -Brianna
    | Posted on 2007-10-10 00:00:00 | by IndependentGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I have felt like this too
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by Lost-Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      aww. It is a good piece but it makes me want to cry.
    | Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work, Kat! This is an enjoyable poem about the world's most poetic subject (Love and separation)! The love affairs that don't work out prepare you for the one big one that does!
    | Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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