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    dots Submission Name: the plastic braindots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsthe plastic braindots
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    perhaps if shakespeare were here now
    he'd make poetic examples of us all
    flicking the raw silk summers of his mind
    i
    assure
    you
    i'm merely disappearing into heaven again

    the languid body and the eyes bright up
    pouring all over in the hush
    i have more words than miracles
    but i'll give you these
    trembling sideways in the black beach
    it's often easier to stand on 4 feet

    you
    never
    knew
    that i spent 23 years in the forest with the cathars
    planning the invasion of your skin
    i never thought i'd end up beneath it

    i tried to not adore you
    especially when i saw you
    standing too close to the moon
    (we all know what that means)
    yet i fell in love anyway
    it was like ramanujan
    basking in his own math

    but i wouldn't expect you to understand
    that infinity comes in different sizes
    you're
    too
    lost
    in the space where the muscle meets the skeleton
    making your brain more plastic
    with every passing day




    Submitted on 2007-05-04 17:50:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      bravo bravo. ancore ancore. how beautiful. you found the space in between muscle and bone and filled made it yours. how i melted at the line
    "that i spent 23 years in the forest with the cathars
    planning the invasion of your skin
    i never thought i'd end up beneath it" how taste ful how adored. the plasitc brain seemed more reality than fancy. how we sood our souls to the uncareing

    shadow
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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