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    dots Submission Name: Toke it Up, Live it Up (please comment)dots
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    Author: DrkRomeo_sGirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere in my mind
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 77/75/26
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 1138
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1225



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    dotsToke it Up, Live it Up (please comment)dots
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    Sometime, my life feels like a sinking hole.
    Tormenting soul, never was my goal.
    This shit gets old.

    Makes me want to toke so bad,
    Choke........... so sad.

    Go back to my Emo ways.....
    Cut again, watch the blood turn from red to gray.

    No tears.

    No tears come from these darkened eyes,
    Someone as messed up as me never cries.

    Im the Pixie of the night.
    Fairy dust, shattered heart,
    Showing me the light , Living it Up,
    Putting up a struggling fight.

    Roll a blunt, Smoke it Up, Toke it Up, Choke it Up.

    Blurr my eyes,
    Blood pouring down my thighs.
    Pierce my leg, feel the pain ,
    Watch the blood go down the drain.
    Live it Up , go insane.

    Insanity is in my own mind.
    Anorexia, my own kind.
    Bulemia, throw it up.
    Lose the weight, then Live it Up.

    Who am I, no one cares.
    so might as well
    Give it Up
    Toke it Up
    Choke it Up
    Live it Up.

    SCREW IT UP!







    Submitted on 2007-05-04 20:13:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is amazing. i can really connect.
    | Posted on 2007-07-29 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW...
    This is deep man!
    Don't get me wring, I like it, but it is deep as hellz!
    <33,


    Lizzz
    | Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by Liz_Renee | [ Reply to This ]
      i know whta you mean but it thing we should let our poem have positive impact on the people
    around us okay
    | Posted on 2007-05-05 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
      seems like you hit an utter rough patch there for pain bleeds from that poem. The flow was a bit off but the message still came over loud and clear. Also if you tried to rhyme you failed in a few places. I just hope that you continue writing and don't take that last fatal leap into the eternally dark abyss from whence there is no return.

    -~-Wolfy-~-
    | Posted on 2007-05-05 00:00:00 | by ShadowedAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      and pluz you got your point across
    | Posted on 2007-05-05 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]
      man a girl in destrees i feel you but i smoke for pleasure when i first started readin this i thought it was from a tweeker no hard feelings but i really like the connection of pain with drugz you implie here nice flow i enjoyed it and this come from a man who hates this kinds of poems i give it 8 keep in touch your boy twistedminded and keep on smoking
    | Posted on 2007-05-05 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel the pain but nice poem its good without smokin the blunt or a joint around here where i live i wouldnt be able to make it sounds like oyu understand hopefully hey check out some of my poems maybe you would like them
    | Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by Cara R.D | [ Reply to This ]


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