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    dots Submission Name: Maybe dots
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    Author: Guernica
    ASL Info:    17/male
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 77/114/67
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMaybe dots
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    You were talking about last nite, I think.
    What were you doing? Things you could never do with me.

    Because I had it in my head that when you're in love with someone, you're the same,
    and my ideas were the supreme right.

    I'd like to think I've changed a little,
    but I'd never show you.
    You've got it in your head that I'm stubborn.
    And you're probably right,
    I was,
    and maybe still am.

    Actually, yeah.
    Because I'm either too proud or scared to say hi.
    You can still do that to me.




    Submitted on 2007-05-04 22:21:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The simplicity and candidness did it for me. Nothing seemed improvised. GOOD JOB!
    | Posted on 2007-05-09 00:00:00 | by onehappypaki | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this.
    Even if it has no structure, poetry metaphors and hidden meaning bull[censored].
    It was great. :>
    The perfect definition of maybe.
    | Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]


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