Cracked Concrete Soul

Author: caballero7137 ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123 Words: 90

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Cracked Concrete Soul

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Good morning! I don’t feel so cheerful but rather tearful. Piece by piece the complete life of mine has been dismantled To the state I currently lie in As a withered soul. A soul floating like a leaf caught in a spin soaring and twirling intricately high in a dance with the wind till I can merge with a cloud and let be dropped once more to simply endure the pain all over forever and ever! Good night!

Submitted on 2007-05-05 10:00:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i really lke the title. i didnt get too much into the poem but do you mind if i used your title in one of my pieces? it wont be the title it will jsut be a part of the write. just asking to be sure your cool with it. i mean, i'll right it anyways but i wontpost it if you dont want me to. tina

| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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