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    dots Submission Name: your biggest fandots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 456
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1457



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       omg.. im so in love. its almost to good to be true ut i know it is.


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    dotsyour biggest fandots
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    i swear its love forever
    and i promise to never
    lie about whether
    or not it's clearer weather
    cuz i know it dont matter
    and they know we hate the chatter
    about whether we're badder
    than the fucking mad hatter
    i know our love is crazy
    but you make my legs lazy
    and you pick me pretty daisies
    you know you're so amazing
    i dont care
    when you stare
    i hate it when you're over there
    i love the feeling of your hair
    on my face when i kiss your lips
    when you touch my hips
    when you dance and do a cheesy dip
    with yours chips
    you make me feel shy
    but i cant lie
    or try
    to deny
    how high
    i get when you walk by
    if you say bye
    i'll cry
    so dont die
    and leave me hangin
    we stopped slangin
    you stopped bangin
    we started changin
    and rearrangin
    our ways
    and went on to better days
    we make better pays
    i feel the blaze
    you make me smile
    it doesn't take a long while
    it makes me wild
    i feel like a child
    but its cool cuz i am
    and i know you can
    be the greatest man
    cuz you understand
    my land
    and you hold my hand
    you're never bland
    i'm your biggest fan



    forever




    Submitted on 2007-05-06 03:00:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      =] haha yea it does kinda sound like rap. I like it alot, and i can completely relate to everything you said, ::thumbs up::
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by Alexandra | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like a rap song. i found myself reading this out loud and rappin' it.
    it's a beautiful feeling,, being so in love and feeling like a child again. ride that wave, lady, ride it while you can!!

    my wish for you is that this is the one, that love that lasts, that takes you on the ride of your life. be honest, be truthful and communicate with each other. that's the key, i think.

    shalom,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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