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    dots Submission Name: Erase From Lifedots
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    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsErase From Lifedots
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    A kiss that reeks of Death
    slowly slithers slide
    throughout my veins
    and begins to rape
    my blood and circulation.
    I turn as numb as stone
    and completely blind
    to the sight of Life.
    Tears gush from my eyes
    in tiny drips of regret
    as my body fossilizes
    and become one
    with the ground.

    While I sink to the depths
    beyond the sight of existence,
    the world simply continues
    in its daily routine.





    Submitted on 2007-05-06 13:56:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well this definatlly has lots of imagry in it. i like the part about fossilizingi into the ground. i could just see it in my head. i liked it. it just rolles when you read it. it leaves you wanting more i guess you could say. have a great day
    | Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]


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