Erase From Life

Author: caballero7137 ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123 Words: 78

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Erase From Life

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A kiss that reeks of Death slowly slithers slide throughout my veins and begins to rape my blood and circulation. I turn as numb as stone and completely blind to the sight of Life. Tears gush from my eyes in tiny drips of regret as my body fossilizes and become one with the ground. While I sink to the depths beyond the sight of existence, the world simply continues in its daily routine.

Submitted on 2007-05-06 13:56:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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well this definatlly has lots of imagry in it. i like the part about fossilizingi into the ground. i could just see it in my head. i liked it. it just rolles when you read it. it leaves you wanting more i guess you could say. have a great day

| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]

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