Waiting to Live -------------------------------------------
Waiting for you
I am waiting to live
Waiting around
I've got nothing left
Not to repeat but here I wait
Sitting on the start line
Yet standing at the end
Can't move
Can't stand still
Wound so tight I think I will burst
Waiting for you to let something happen
Just release me from this
Just let go
But you won't
I keep waiting to live
Waiting to be me again
I've let you take everything
My life, my love, my ability to function
You've left me feeling useless
I'm just here, barely
Not really much at all anymore
You've taken it all the way
Slowly chipped away my life,
After a lifetime of pain without love
But how can I live...move on...as you put it...
If you won't let me go...
Riddle me that...and I'll do it...
Waiting to live is just not worth living for...
Why should I wait to have something that's mine...
What makes me think you have the right to take it away from me?
Honestly, I know you don't but I will just sit here...of course...and wait to live...
"I've let you take everything
My life, my love, my ability to function
You've left me feeling useless"
That part is awesome. It really speaks to me . I might have to agree with considering stanzas for this but with this kind of write I guess it could go either way but it kind of seems run on in one stanza but yea I'll stop now because I'm starting to ramble about nothing. love you!!!
Ah yes the old "lost love" poem. It's written quite well. I can tell that there is some feeling to it. Perhaps a bit of truth? Mheh. I don't believe in love. I believe that any attraction or bond towards another person is completely selfish and lustful or in hopes of gaining something (material or not). Other than my beliefs, i find your poem to be quite funny. It makes good sense. It reminds me of a time that i believed in love and allowed someone to take everything from me. My only real advice on it is to separate it into stanzas. I feel that it would give the poem a bit more strength. It seems a bit disorganized and like more of a rant. That's about all i can think of. Good day.
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Submission Name: Waiting to Live
. I might have to agree with considering stanzas for this but with this kind of write I guess it could go either way but it kind of seems run on in one stanza but yea I'll stop now because I'm starting to ramble about nothing. love you!!!