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    dots Submission Name: Ah, Killing.dots

    Author: Shiboo-sama
    ASL Info:    18-m
    Elite Ratio:    6.66 - 16/10/10
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsAh, Killing.dots

    What's wrong with killing?
    You know that if you could,
    you would.

    If you had the gull,
    If you were skilled;
    everyone around you would be killed.

    Then what's wrong with me?
    It feels great
    to have blood on your face.

    Another person's blood to
    reflect how you are.
    The conquerer emerges unscarred

    People say it feels bad to kill
    but that's just because they've never tried.
    They speak only bias and lies.

    I know for a fact
    it's not that bad.
    It's great to be on the attack.

    Drenched in the blood of others
    with the stench of death
    and not quite out of breath,
    i know that i could kill just one more.

    Submitted on 2007-05-06 23:39:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "this is really sick and it doesnt actually contribute anything worth taking note of except for your unbalanced state of mind i guess."

    Ha! what else is poetry for?
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by Shiboo-sama | [ Reply to This ]
      well i am going to play pretend that you are really into videogames and cannot seperate reality from gaming.

    or... you are at war in somalia or something like that.

    this is really sick and it doesnt actually contribute anything worth taking note of except for your unbalanced state of mind i guess.

    have a thought about straying from 3 line stanzas and rhyming next time you write something. i think that this "magic formula" of writing makes anything written sound even worse than it already does because the rhyme makes it all sound so cheesy.

    sorry. aint got nothing to say.
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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