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    dots Submission Name: Stupid Boydots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Rant/What you did
    Total Views: 544
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1150



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    dotsStupid Boydots
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    You opened the doors.
    Entered my sacred place.

    You destroyed it all.
    There is nothing special left.

    No more good memories.
    They’ve all been erased.

    Because of you, you stupid boy.
    There is nothing left for me.

    You learned my deep dark secrets.
    Then you shared them with the world.

    You are such an idiot.
    You questioned why we parted.

    You said it was my fault.
    You told all your friends.

    They viewed me as an enemy.
    Did you tell them all the shit you did to me?

    No you didn’t.
    You left out those nagging details.

    They don’t need to know that.
    So what if you sent me to bed crying every night.

    If you made me feel lower then dirt.
    That doesn’t matter it was all my fault wasn’t it?

    You need to take your share of the blame.
    It really wasn’t all me.

    You need to grow up.
    Quit being a child.

    Take responsibility for your actions.
    Stop blaming it on me.




    Submitted on 2007-05-07 08:59:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      There are likely hundreds of girls who would stand up and cheer when they heard this piece. I would be one of them.

    But it is a little cliché. However, a topic like this one is practically impossible to write about without repeating someone else's angst.

    In any case,
    I feel this right along with you.

    -E.
    | Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by Puzzle_d_Box | [ Reply to This ]
      There is some good writing here...actually the first 8 lines of the poem are excellent, superb and would stand alone as a fine, fine, poem...(the rest of the poem is too typical...I understand that there is real feeling here, no question, but poetically...) bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-05-09 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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