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    dots Submission Name: The Strength to Walk Awaydots

    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Strength to Walk Awaydots

    Please donít look at me
    it will make it harder to go.
    Please donít speak to me,
    I donít want your words,
    I donít need to know,
    how I messed up again.
    How I lost my faith,
    in my life, in my lord, in my friend.
    I know I did it myself.
    I know the fault is mine,
    but please donít look at me,
    I mean to go this time.
    Youíre an angel
    in the guise of a man
    and you donít deserve this pain.
    This never ending tangle
    has nothing for you to gain.
    So please donít speak to me,
    I need the strength of silence.
    I need to leave
    so you can be free.
    Iím putting an end to this violence
    that has scarred your heart and soul.
    I have to be the strong one here.
    I have to be the one to let go.
    I know this disease that is my life
    has taken such a heavy toll on yours.
    Iím the needle in your veins.
    I am the blood stains on your knife.
    The sickness that remains.
    Iím trying to reconcile all,
    Iím trying to make it right,
    so please donít speak to me,
    Please donít look at me like that.
    Show me anger,
    show me hate,
    so I can walk away.
    Please donít show me tears
    or I just might stay.

    Submitted on 2007-05-07 11:17:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is such a universal poem. describes the feelings of being unwanted so well. i like the length of the poem too because you fit in just enough hurt to make the poem what it is. great job.

    I know the fault is mine,
    but please donít look at me,
    I mean to go this time

    those are great lines

    - kase
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that this is a good piece. it has a great message in it. if only more people that hurt people could just walk away like that. to be the biger person. the only thing i would suggest working on is the flow of the piece. it does not roll off your tunge very well but i think that it is a great piece all i n all
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]

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