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    dots Submission Name: The Super Fighting Squaddots
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    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 60/131/105
    Words: 1854
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This came to me randomly and now I don't know what I will do with it but I will make it mroe than just a short story


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    dotsThe Super Fighting Squaddots
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    5-7-07 The Super Fighting Squad!

    Episode 1: The Amazing Sliding Glider!


    It was a normal peaceful afternoon in the city. The cars were vrooming, the people

    were screaming obsenities at each other and the criminals were doing their normal criminal

    routines. But suddenly something out of the ordinary happened a building just up and

    disapeared! Who could do such a bad and evil thing!?
    "It is I! The Sliding Glider!" Screamed a masked man in all black floating on a

    hoverboard equipped with all kinds of technical goodies.
    "Until you the people of the city bow down to me and pronounce me the mayor you will not

    get your beloved building back!" He screamed as he hovered over a crowd of curious people

    staring at him.
    "But we don't care about that building!" One person said.
    "Yeah, that was the H.Q of the people for Illegal Immigrant's rights. Infact we thank you

    for getting rid of THAT building!" Then the people began to cheer. The Sliding Glider's

    criminal record didn't start off to evilly he has done an accidental good deed! Then he

    hovered over a different building one that was yellow with a blue stripe on the side of the

    roof. It was the most popular fast food joint in town.
    "Ok, how about THIS building!? If you do not pronounce ME the mayor of the city I will

    make THIS building disapear!" Then the crowd grew scared and gasped with surprise.
    "Who will stop such an evil deed from happening!?" Then all the sunlight turned into

    darkness and the city was pitch black. When the light came back the Sliding Glider was off

    of his hover board and on the ground next to a man dressed in all black with his back to

    the crowd.
    "You have a lot of nerve mysterious dark man!"
    "The name's Black Richard! And I am your worst nightmare!" As he said that his eyes glew

    a thick blood red and he picked the glider up by the cuff of his suit and threw him down

    and the crowd cheered. The glider then pressed a button on his arm and his hover board

    flew back to him and he jumped on and flew up into the sky.
    "Let's see how tough you are when I am way up here!" He said as he laughed maniacally and

    the crowd gasped again. As he flew higher a big purple dragon with a wingspan of 20 feet

    flew in and knocked the glider off his board once again.
    "What the Hell is this!?" He asked very confused.
    "The name's Drake! And I am just one of many folks that are here to stop your evil deed!"

    He said as his horns dug into the glider's abdomin and he flapped his mighty wings. The

    crowd could no longer see the fight they were so high up. Height didn't stop the Glider

    from pressing that button on his arm thus getting the hover board to come to him and knock

    the dragon away from him. With the dragon distracted he pressed a different button on his

    arm and the board released a thick yellow smoke. The dragon coughed and the Glider got

    away.
    "I've gotta get back to my H.Q before anymore weird heroes come and try and -" He was then

    attacked by a huge man with flaming orange hair. The Glider and the man struggled to

    maintain balance on his one man hover board but then the man punched him in the face

    knocking him off the board falling about 600 feet. The man then used the hover board to go

    under the glider and catch him and they then flew into an alleyway where they could fight

    without any witnesses.
    "Who are you now!?"
    "The name's Sgt. Heat, and I am here to melt your gizmo!" He then ducked down as if he were

    going to headbutt the Glider but instead a huge flame released from his head covering the

    Glider in fire.
    "Heh, fire resistent clothing!" He was then struck down by a green ape-like man.
    "Thank you for joining in, Ace!" The Sgt said.
    "Ace? How many of you freaks ARE there!?"
    "Four! We are the Super Fighting Squad!" Ace said putting his hands at his hips.
    "Ace, I told you not to do that!" The SGT. said.
    "No, matter it's time to vanish out of here!"
    "I don't think so!" Ace said as he ran as quick as lightning and knocked him off his hover

    board and the board spun out like crazy crashing into the side of a building.
    "You may have got me off my board but I can still fight you!" The SGT then covered him in

    fire again, and once the smoke cleared Ace turned himself into electricity and bolted at

    him but as soon as the Glider was struck Ace immediatley turned back into his human form

    and electricuted himself.
    "Rubber gloves! He's wearing rubber!" Ace screamed as he was a bit dizzy from the

    encounter.
    "Well, why don't I help you there!" The SGT then jumped on top of the Glider and ripped

    off his gloves and his shirt. Ace then turned back into electricity and bolted onto the

    Glider electricuting him enough to knock him out but not kill him. The dragon and Richard

    Black then joined them at the scene.
    "Another job well done for us, the Super Fighting Squad!" Ace said doing his arms at his

    hips victory pose.
    "Stop doing that!" The others yelled at him.
    "C'mon let's get out of here before the media arrives! Until next time see y'all later!"

    Ace said as he turned into electricity and vanished into the sky. Ace Elec returned to his

    laboratory to do more research on his shocking condition.
    "I hate it when he does that!" The Sgt said.
    "It is kind of annoying but he is the one that gets our jobs complete so we can't complain.

    I know you and he had differences growing up before you were your super selves but now we

    are all here and we just gotta live life now instead of back then!" Richard said as he

    created a black out once more and then disapeared as the lights came back on. Richard

    Black returned to not his home but at least a place with a roof on it at the City's

    Homeless Shelter.
    "Don't let him get to ya, SGT!" The dragon said as he flew off into the sun and returned

    to his cave that he resided in just 20 miles west of the city. The SGT returned to his

    home with his lovely wife, Darma and his two kids Jesse and James. None of them knew his

    super secret infact the Super Fighting Squad was never known to the public eye because the

    police took all the credit for everything that went down and was defeated.

    Meanwhile: Before the police and media arrived at the scene of the Glider's defeat

    he woke up and escaped without ever being seen by anyone else.
    "Those heroes think they are so cool! I'll show them! I just need to setup a nice trap!

    I know I will rig the main park of the city to get them all caught in their own game.

    First I will wear all rubber and skin tight so it cannot be ripped off of me. Then I will

    create a pool in the middle of the park so Mr. Fire comes and tries to get me he will fall

    in with the proper disguise of pavement! Then for the dragon I will hide a series of bear

    traps and tranquilizer shots all around for the being to step on once I clip its wings.

    And last but not least Mr. Dark will not be able to do his blackout trick once I trap him

    in a capsule that shocks him every five seconds!" And he spent all night getting all the

    traps perfect for when they attack him in the exact order that he was attacked the first

    time. Hovering above the city's park he exclaims
    "Citizens of the city! The mayor is dead! And so will all his office mates if you do not

    take me as your new mayor! What's it going to be?" Then Richard appeared under him. The

    Glider flew down and knocked Richard Black right onto the platform that forms his shocking

    capsule. Then the dragon came next flew down to try and save his friend and he ended up

    trapped with bear traps. The Glider then flew down and gave him an elephant tranquilizer.

    The dragon gave a huge roar and then fell asleep. Then the SGT came and chased the Glider

    on his hover board over the next trap and as he stepped on the faux concrete he fell in the

    pool making him very weak. Then came Ace Elec he bolted as electricity first right into

    the Glider but since he was wearing his rubber suit Ace turned back to his human form and

    was electricuted. The Glider then threw him down near the dragon where he was hit with a

    bear trap and injected with a tranquilizer.
    "Excellent! With them out of the way it is time! So citizens what's it going to be!?"

    Oh no! Looks like the heroes are in trouble! Is this the end of the Super

    Fighting Squad!? Does the series end in the first episode!? Will the badguy actually stop

    the usual cliché and win!? Find out next week on another spine tingling episode of: The

    Super Fighting Squad!




    Submitted on 2007-05-07 13:20:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      man you certainly are crazy...

    You should have done it with illustrations and this cud have been a hit comic or something.

    fancy, no one commented on it... its too long to read.

    all in all, you have some typos and nutty phrases...

    But I guess it parodies any stupid show ever made on TV

    I had some great laugh and the crazy aspect is its really original.

    keep it up
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]


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