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    dots Submission Name: The Final Nail In The Coffin, But Have You Seen Mydots

    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Final Nail In The Coffin, But Have You Seen Mydots

    The Final Nail In The Coffin, But Have You Seen My Heart?

    Iím on an overdose of adrenaline
    Theres no sense to be made , I'm a maniac
    But I've got my life to waste
    And I believe in the death of coffins
    So watch me hammer in the very last nail
    And we can be on our way

    This is an akward situation
    But I am not looking for a fight
    And untill the last tears fall
    The stars are'nt shining so brightly above my head now
    So everyone looks down
    But I never strike back, and I always look down
    Who wants to look like a outsider?
    But I believe in the death of hearts
    So watch me lose my way

    I'll use the same old lines of how it's all my fault
    I won't complain and I won't whine I'll watch it all
    Fall apart in front of my face
    Its an amazing fall from grace
    But I'm not the only one to blame
    But I cannot say

    I'm through being a pushover,
    so now I'll stand my ground
    These stars are shining ever so lightly
    And I know words are only words
    But what are my words to you?
    I believe in killing things before they get torn apart
    So watch me bang the final nail into the coffin
    But have you seen my heart?

    Submitted on 2007-05-07 14:46:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that's how i am. i just stand there and take it as my heart rips inside. and it pisses me off to the millionth degree. and sorry, no, i haven't seen your heart...or my brain for that matter...

    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]

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