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    dots Submission Name: Time warpdots
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    Author: foxy lee
    ASL Info:    20 f/CT/SA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 27/23/10
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTime warpdots
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    Time couldn't be slower
    waiting for an answer

    The empty space
    inside my chest

    Grows larger and larger
    with every passing second

    sometimes I wish
    I could take it
    like a boy

    would I get more joy?
    guess I'll never know

    feels like I'm trapped
    in some time warp

    floating round and round
    with nowhere to go

    waiting and waiting
    in vain

    increases the pain
    inside my heart

    sometimes it seems
    time was made to taunt me

    time couldn't be slower




    Submitted on 2007-05-07 14:52:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, but what are you waiting for? I'm just curious cause I hate waiting myself just like I'll hate waiting for you to answer my question. Anyway, I often feel the same way, but still wonder what it is that I'm waiting for.....I hope it comes, whatever it is cause I'm really sick of waiting.
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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