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    dots Submission Name: remissiondots
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    Author: DBC
    ASL Info:    21/m/ar
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 55/59/29
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 761
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    dotsremissiondots
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    what are you still doing here boy
    you could have all that you want
    you could own all the parking lots
    thats where the money's at
    all there is is controll and those that have it
    who would you rather have the button?
    go on and give the people a hand
    you've taken all the hands
    havent you one to lend?
    you may leave your mind to worry
    i give you permission
    but leave my mind alone its in poor condition
    to answer to your questions
    to state
    opinions
    ideas
    feelings
    its all tick tock tick tock
    clockwork
    and everything you think is the next salvation
    a salvation like a cigarette or the junkies heroin
    give
    take
    recieve
    expend
    on me




    Submitted on 2007-05-07 17:11:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "go on and give the people a hand
    you've taken all the hands
    havent you one to lend?"

    nice. very nice. isn't that the truth. i haven't read anything like this in a long time it's wonderful to hear that style again. i enjoyed the piece a great deal. the way the lines almost trip over each other has such a dashing strut.


    "and everything you think is the next salvation
    a salvation like a cigarette or the junkies heroin
    give
    take
    recieve
    expend
    on me"

    this ending was a deffinate fave. the salvation in a junkis cigarette. wow it simply breathes. concrete reality of our own weakness

    shadow
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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