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    dots Submission Name: Prison?dots
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    Author: JustinSMonnin
    Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 1/2/2
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPrison?dots
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    Trapped in here with fellow inmates
    They work us until our minds break
    This cage made of brick holds within
    A souless school full of children.




    Submitted on 2007-05-07 21:09:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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