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    dots Submission Name: Stardust and Sinner's Ashdots

    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 872
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       been forever since I've posted. I found this. there were only the first eight lines, so I completed it and put it up.

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    dotsStardust and Sinner's Ashdots

    Smoke rising higher
    Choke upon the fumes
    A line of sinners
    Blackened 'neath the moon
    Crowd roaring higher
    Above screams of pain
    Sneers of agony
    A call of disdain

    You shall be led to your God
    You shall be remembered a saint
    Bow, cower before the great
    Within the altairs of your flaws

    The flames extinguished
    Now seared husks remain
    Purified once more
    This town of sin
    Time to test your faith
    In dead tradition
    Forgive not one thing
    Bask in perdition

    You shall be led to sainthood
    You shall be remembered a God
    Bury and guard our great frauds
    Give into temptation; the fruit

    The stars align tonight
    A child is born, five grown men die
    An angel falls tonight
    Shattered before our very eyes

    The stars align tonight
    Dawning wrong upon the right.

    Submitted on 2007-05-07 23:57:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well I can't say I entirely understood the intent and meaning of this, I was impressed with some of the language, and the twisting as it were of some conventional clichés.
    interesting read...
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]

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