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    dots Submission Name: Fancy McBlue Jaydots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Perhaps I sat in the sun too long yesterday! he he he

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    dotsFancy McBlue Jaydots
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    Fancy McBlue Jay
    hopping around
    the base of your
    tree

    Stealthily stealing
    food from poor
    George McKitty!

    A treausre trove
    full in your
    nest

    Boasting as
    broad and deep
    as your chest!

    "Yes, summer's
    for staking
    your claim...

    For come winter
    Life isn't
    a game.

    So come next
    year
    without a
    fear

    I'll still be around...

    Now, Off I go!
    Tis food to be found!!!"

    Chattered Fancy
    McBlue Jay

    Up & Away
    with nothing
    left to say!




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      The bluejay,

    a thief, a rebble-rouser,

    fighting off the other birds,

    fierce, yet with a cute appearance,

    proud and haughty, blue and white,

    Bluejay always declares a fight.

    Bluejay, hopping, skipping, attacking,

    but to us humans, he is a funny old lad.

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    I like bluejays. They are neat little birds. But they are also aggressive little thieves. Or so I've heard. Anyways, this was a cute, mischievous little poem. Good write!
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. i think its kind of funny about mcblue stealing from mckitty. i like it. one of the better pieces i've read today.




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    | Posted on 2007-05-12 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiffany, this piece brought back memories of my New Hampshire childhood watching the bluejays screwing with every creature around. They cared not who they messed with as long as it benefited them and their needs. Thanks for the little memory jog.
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      Very McWitty - I must say.

    Very well McWritten !

    McCK.
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      :) Nifty bit of nature here, with an animated sense of freshness. "McBluejay, McKitty, - reminds me of the doctor's nicknames on 'Gray's Anatomy'. LOL

    You made me smile :)
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by Wild Flower | [ Reply to This ]


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