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    dots Submission Name: Let it godots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
    Total Views: 647
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 459



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       He doesn't want her.... I don't know how to explain what is happening to her.... He told me he was going to move and that he didn't love her.... I really hate this.. I swear if he hurts her I'll kick his ass. Does anyone know a better way to help my friend?


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    dotsLet it godots
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    Have you learned a lesson?
    I know you're love was lost.
    But I tried to tell you, what it was I thought.
    You turned away and called me jealous.
    I'm sorry that he hurt you.
    but you need to know.
    There are better guys out there.
    He isn't worth it, not a single tear.
    You will get over this.
    I know in my heart you will.
    Hold your head up high,
    Please let this dream go.




    Submitted on 2007-05-08 12:23:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one. Especially the beginning "Have you learned a lesson?
    I know you're love was lost.
    But I tried to tell you, what is was I thought."

    It flows nicely.

    But did you mean "what IT was I thought"?

    Thank you.

    -L
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Toker | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha i can see that you were right about this guy all along. did she ever learn her lesson?
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
      you said it all...but have you said it to your friend? read her the poem...maybe then she'll understand/see/realize.
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by rastas edible | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a little late on this one, but if there was anything, I'd say she would have to move on as well and concentrate on making herself stronger.

    You can tell someone like this so many things... so many optimistic things, but it is up to them to take them. It really comes down to what the person has to realize within themselves.

    Good skill.
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by JerichoMccoy | [ Reply to This ]


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