Hey gal. It's a nice poem, but I think (just my opinion, don't listen to me) it needs to be just a little longer. And I know the two line stanzas are your thing, but it doesn't really work with this poem. It gives it a rather forced feeling. Maybe try longer stanzas with this one, or no stanzas at all. And maybe rearrange/combine some of them.
Confusion fogs the brain,
Shadowing thoughts in the concious mind.
Making you think that your insane.
Ideas now [becoming] hard to find.
I took out 'are' and added 'becoming'. You don't have to, but you get the idea I was getting at. Like I said, all this is only my opinion, so pay it no heed. In any case, it's a great poem and a great subject. And with a couple of tweaks, will become even better. Look forward to reading more of your stuff.
This poem has a lot of potential. It has wonderful meaning, and I'm sure lots of thought went into it, because it shows. The only problem i have with it is that it seems like you were trying to hard to rhyme, and the majority of your concentration went into just that. There are plenty of poems out there that rhyme, but only some people can pull it off. I'm sure you can too, just not with this one. One thing I've tried is just writing the poem out with no rhymes, then afterwards, see if i can change the words around to rhyme them. That way, the first thing you are thinking about is the poem and what it is to mean and all that fun stuff...then the rhyming. Other than that, it was great. Good job!