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    dots Submission Name: Disown Youdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsDisown Youdots
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    You made it yourself
    Those twisted salt memories,
    Conjugated thoughts,
    And Default remedies,
    Excuses for lies,
    And abuses of family ties,
    But we got a cameo of you,
    From the calamitied spies,
    Front page news,
    Guess who lied about it,
    What? Money is in it?
    Are you trying to hide without it?
    We found out your scheme,
    We know who is to blame,
    We told everybody, and,
    They all know the same,
    We’ve got records recorded,
    We made them all the while,
    Of who sad what,
    And which number to dial,
    Six-five-six, so what?
    Two- nine- four- five,
    Take the slander from,
    The family name , or I--




    Submitted on 2007-05-09 09:15:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow I like the way this one flows.. Nothing seems forced.. I like it..
    | Posted on 2007-05-09 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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