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    dots Submission Name: Nature Haikudots
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    Author: Raven E.
    ASL Info:    18/Female/France
    Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 42/30/8
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Haiku/Happy
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    dotsNature Haikudots
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    Snowflakes falling
    Never ceasing to touch us
    In a wondrous way

    The truth of truths, it
    Heals and hurts many, and
    It gives hope to more

    Shimmering waves
    Coming… going rising and
    Falling… clear sea blue

    The eyes sparkling
    In the darkness: crouch, spring
    Miss, fall, roll, purr, sleep

    Panting lolling but
    Barking in the silence when
    Danger approaches

    A dark blaze, from deep
    Reaches of the sun, burning,
    Never ceasing, kah

    Scribbles on paper
    And wood, scribbles that mean the
    Whole world to us all

    Crimson and gold are
    The colors of beautiful
    Autumn… leaves falling

    Irises so blue
    Or black or brown forever
    Looking far away

    Sun rises in the
    East bringing with it very
    Lovely light… yellow

    Blue as the morning
    Ocean, lapis lazuli…
    What delicate stone

    Queen tigress of all
    Flowers, delicate lily
    Blooming so fragrant




    Submitted on 2004-06-14 02:02:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      All of them on their own are haikus, but a lot of them making one whole story, if you will, kind of takes away the point of a haiku doesn't it? I would call this more like poetry. But one thing that is like haiku is that the images are created very easy and its very easy to understand, so some nice work!
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by 2 Late 4 Lyrics | [ Reply to This ]
      hey,
    yer kat loves nature. ur last comment was on the 14 of june this year? eek!
    hey wait thts was my b day! wooohooo!
    neways... ... i love the imagery and wrd choice but i can't help but miss the point to this poem lol unless you are just appreciating the beauty of nature - then i guess its spot on
    i was able to go through it rather quickly but i still got a great feel from it, then i read it a second time and i was like ''yer man'' then i read a third time...and well yer i got bored but... hehe

    laters dahlin
    anoutia
    ¤~x~xXx~x~¤
    | Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by Clementina oso | [ Reply to This ]
      It looks like you spent a little time and thought putting this together. That is to say it appears very well thought out and put together. I appreciated the attention to detail when it comes to your poem structure. Very good visual imagery derived from your wording. Nice poem.
    | Posted on 2004-06-14 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]



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