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    dots Submission Name: Winged Angels Threedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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       Watching birds and being with the birds is spiritual ~*~

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    dotsWinged Angels Threedots
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    The Winged Angels Three
    a circle and a glide
    Above the slow rushing river
    below the granite-stripped cliff

    Watch in wonder
    how their shadows
    completing circles
    and the still, hot air
    feathers an oasis

    And three more
    float to Life ~ ~ ~

    And a bird call
    up to heaven
    glides in angel
    number seven

    Command of squad
    the soar
    to dive
    then circle free

    Inspired universal
    vision
    begun with only three

    Oh, now there are eleven
    and the stillness has
    birthed flight

    So I am soaring
    with Love
    as my soul is NOW a kite ~*~





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      MY birds are crows and swans I was marrying a couple of my friends on the banks of lake michigan a couple years back and as they began to speak thier vows three swan stood behind me i could feel their presence but being the minister i could hardly just look away during such an important moment After I said the tradtional you may kiss the bride the swan climbed back into the water and swam away. It was my first and will most likely be my only wedding unless life throws another request my way. Anyway I liked this for the most part it has a few things I love in a poem internal rhyme and alitteration. The last few lines I though felt a bit drawn out in the language
    My suggestion
    " So I am soaring
    with Love
    my soul NOW a kite"
    As always do what you will. peace
    | Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write!
    I love bird watching. They are amazing creatures for sure.

    Love the ending lines ...

    "So I am soaring
    with Love
    as my soul is NOW a kite ~*~"


    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by Wild Flower | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...WOW!

    Tiff, this is like, POW!

    I really really really really really really really really really like this one.

    The birds, pure and light, slowly increase in number. Whoever has , more will be given to him, but whoever has not, even what he has will be taken away. This is a case of "have", and more becomes added.

    I really like the ending stanzas:

    "Oh, now there are eleven
    and the stillness has
    birthed flight

    So I am soaring
    with Love
    as my soul is NOW a kite"

    You use your rhyme very well, and it is powerful. Like a smack in the face.

    Mmmm, smooby smacks!
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, how do you do it? I've tried, and it's just not in me to write in the style that you do. Not just the formating, of which I could never get to work for this poem. But your simple graceful natural flow, that just seems to be exhurted from you ever so elliquantly. It's so peaceful and tranquil, as are all your writes, and still they never feel the same. Awesome!
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful write yet once again Tiff
    I want to share a story with you if you allow me
    Last year when I lived in California I had a Dove land on my shoulder and actually allowed me to walk into the house with her resting on my shoulder
    I showed my Dad and he was shocked
    I then walked back outside and the Dover preseded to fly into the tree looking right through my window
    Tiff that was a very spiritual experience for me and I do strongly believe that Dove carried some kind of energy to me to help me Move Forward
    Its like I always say Tiff there is definately a reason The Good Lord decided to create animals before humans
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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