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    dots Submission Name: Kiss of Deathdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    24/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 619/551/200
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 317
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    dotsKiss of Deathdots
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    Wrap me in your arms tonight
    tell me it'll be ok.
    even if you have to lie;
    I need to hear this...

    In this love I will die
    but know it was worth it!

    Another night of shallow dreams
    tragedy wrapped endlessly
    I'll never wake again to see
    you smiling down upon me

    In the whispers of a thousand screams...'
    "No one escpaes eternity
    breathe gently, come to me
    take my hand, know this truth;
    this kiss of death, we giveth to you.
    It's not so cold
    not so bleak
    we love no one
    nor hate you see;

    we're all passengers
    on this carousel cruise
    though come too short
    she'd done the same for you

    now take your heart
    and say goodbye
    take her kiss
    it's time to..."




    Submitted on 2007-05-09 14:02:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this reminds me of a man who is in a rocky relationship, perhaps his marriage is a bit different then expected. perhaps the idea of divorce has been discussed yet he and his partner still sleep in the same bed.

    as he lay there he wishes, he hopes, she will just roll over and wish him good night with a kiss to reasure him all is alright...

    but the relationship is almost through and there was no kiss which signals the death.
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is very sentimental, intimate and spiritual and I read and feel the title in a different way than literal death but to death of self and the surrender to what your soul and spirit feel through a divine nature.

    I related to and enjoyed the reflection of this piece!

    Love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      dude this poem is THE coolest. the wording and everything is awsome yo.

    absolutly luvly poem mannn.


    peace
    Grim.


    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know about this........It seem's like it is an almost beautiful piece but I don't see any rythym to it, no flow. I like the thought.......If I am even reading it correctly....

    -Annmarie
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]
      This didn't have quite the same musical feelings most of your writing does; I guess I'll have to cross staind off the list of acceptable things to listen to while losing myself in your writing- or maybe just the song I have on; idk.
    I get the feeling that was meant to be more depressing, but I tasted an acceptance with it...maybe the kind of acceptance that's only gained through pain. This is actually pretty interesting; a year ago this would have twisted itself around the little thorns in my oh so emo heart, but I feel alot better since then, so I don't think I'll be too depressed about it. I actually thought this was beautiful, it read like so many things....I got the vauge imperssion of a caress maybe for reassurance or to just strengthen the point, I'm not entirely sure on that one. anyway I liked this a lot, even if it wasn't the absolute best thing you've ever written. (and that's supposed to be a compliment)
    love and peace,
    -Jess
    | Posted on 2007-05-09 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]



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