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    dots Submission Name: REVENGE!!!dots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 757
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 728



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    dotsREVENGE!!!dots
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    Could this be more complicating?
    For you this is just a game.
    For me this is everything.
    Could you be more shamed?

    I promise I won't love you.
    But then again why would I want to please you?

    Everytime I want you out of my head,
    you somehow find another way back in.
    But this time you stayed our and,
    it's never felt so good.

    I promise I won't love you.
    But then again why would I want to please you?

    Revenge is so sweet when it's on the other foot.
    I had you smothered with my words,
    I made you quiver by my touch.
    I'll show you how it feels to have a broken heart.




    Submitted on 2007-05-09 16:03:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      HEY I LIKE THIS
    BECAUSE ITS SHORT WITH ALOT OF DETAIL AND IT GETS TO THE POINT
    I HATE READING LONG ASS POEMS, BUT ANY WAYS- NICE WRITE AND KEEP IT UP

    SAM
    | Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]
      get his ass hahaha

    but don't get caught up doing it all the time, cuz [censored] comes back on you you know... and heartache and heartbreak and being let down is all part of learning, love, and life. you just gotta roll with it, but your still young and you will both get over it so for now...

    GET HIS ASS hahaha
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]


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