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    dots Submission Name: i never was one to believe in omens, but...dots
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    Author: flyfire
    ASL Info:    17, Female, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 33/19/14
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       this is just a thought i had.
    its posted on another of my poetry accounts as well [http://www.poetry.tetto.org/~heat-her].

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    dotsi never was one to believe in omens, but...dots
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    When we were sixteen
    you drew me a heart

    for valentines.

    Years later
    after love and hurt

    and beginings of love again

    we drove
    together.

    I laughed as

    I saw the crusted juices
    of a furred feline

    stained on the road

    in the shape
    of a heart

    and left you in the morning.




    Submitted on 2007-05-09 21:21:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ironic huh?...

    well... this would've been better in the form of a letter I think...

    nice laugh though :
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]


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