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    dots Submission Name: Dinners Donedots
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    Author: Lee Minsu
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Seoul
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 101/96/27
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 850
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1029



    Description:
       Daydream as usual and avoiding homework...


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    dotsDinners Donedots
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    When will you be home?
    I have the rice sittin on the stove
    Kimchi sitting on the counter
    There's even a sweet treat in the fridge
    Besides the one waiting outside the door
    Been thinking about your arrival
    How long has it been?
    4 hours or 4 minutes
    Time slips my mind
    I've writting a few poems since you left
    The usual junk about what we do and how we do it
    You know how to make me smile
    Yell
    Hell, even dance beneath the sheets
    But that's not why I wait for you
    Its outside the bedroom and in the hallway
    Or in your office, resting in a frame
    Or that little token we exchange sliding on your finger
    Or maybe it the look in your eyes and the parting of my lips
    A hand on my chin
    Another on your waist
    Moments like those are hard to grasp
    These words fail to translate
    My fantasies and your dreams
    As I sit here and wait for when you come home




    Submitted on 2007-05-10 06:29:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really, really like this. Ron, is right, it is beautiful because it is simple and yet there are so many details that I feel like I know you and the one that you wait for.

    Watch yourself on your spelling at points, "I've writting a few poems since you left" but this is just me nitpicking so that I don't just give compliments.

    I love that I can relate to almost every part of it, and that parts of it make me smile, especially, "You know how to make me smile
    Yell" Because in a relationship this is so true.

    Many apologises for this awful comment
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by Fifi | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful Lee
    This is a write where the reader can easily feel the Love you hold for your soulmate
    I really enjoyed reading this as this write returned me to a Lost Love I had in the past
    Thank You for helping me bring back lost memories
    You are exceptionally good at that Lee
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-05-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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