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Intertwining Vines of Words


Author: caballero7137
ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123
Words: 90
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Intertwining Vines of Words




I submit to the will of a doll
that has my life and soul
lock and shackled in a bind
with intertwining vines of words.
Words are wrapping around
like a diamondback snake.
I can feel the literal squeeze
as I can feel bones crushing
and vital organs collapsing
so I can become a paperweight
inside a tiny little box.
A little wooden box
that lays a yonder below
Earth’s central core,
where salvageable hope
and salvageable light
or possible rescue
are not probable scenarios




Submitted on 2007-05-10 06:37:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i see a LOT of southern influence here... its ok... JUST ok... and the word snake doesn't belong... choppy flow... and semi artistic... I get the feeling that you might be capable of better given what I can see about your personality here, maybe your a little bit of an underachiever... try harder dude

Psyko
| Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]


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