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    dots Submission Name: Intertwining Vines of Wordsdots

    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsIntertwining Vines of Wordsdots

    I submit to the will of a doll
    that has my life and soul
    lock and shackled in a bind
    with intertwining vines of words.
    Words are wrapping around
    like a diamondback snake.
    I can feel the literal squeeze
    as I can feel bones crushing
    and vital organs collapsing
    so I can become a paperweight
    inside a tiny little box.
    A little wooden box
    that lays a yonder below
    Earth’s central core,
    where salvageable hope
    and salvageable light
    or possible rescue
    are not probable scenarios

    Submitted on 2007-05-10 06:37:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i see a LOT of southern influence here... its ok... JUST ok... and the word snake doesn't belong... choppy flow... and semi artistic... I get the feeling that you might be capable of better given what I can see about your personality here, maybe your a little bit of an underachiever... try harder dude

    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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