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    dots Submission Name: Its the waydots

    Author: gloomyanddoomy
    ASL Info:    17,female
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 81/426/527
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 500
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 485

       the begining is questions from my friends about this guy....the second half is what im saying

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    dotsIts the waydots

    they ask me.....
    Is it the way
    thats he makes you cry?
    Is it the way
    that hes never around?
    Is it the way
    that he talks behind your back?

    but no.....
    Its the way
    that he makes me feel
    Its the way
    that he kisses me
    Its the way
    that he makes me fall in love
    Its the way
    that hes in my mind

    Deticated to: Hunter

    Submitted on 2007-05-10 06:46:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this poem simple but to te point keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by soul_driven | [ Reply to This ]
      It's simple and to the point. It's nice. But it struck me as ... cliché. It seems like every poem out there is about love, suicide, depression and cutting. I like how you put it though. I like it. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by katieboo6 | [ Reply to This ]
      I did like this poem allot. It is very simple, and packs a hell of a punch. Very, Very Very creative. I never thought of this topic from the point of view you express. I would like to add this to my favorite list, but I am new here, and do not know how to do it.

    What I like about your masterpiece is that you show this duality in the love that you have with this person. You acknowledge the bad, but you embrace the good.
    I guess you have that special personality that always see the good in people. For you the glass must be half full.

    Publish it, and I want it.

    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by itinnmannn | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, yes Yes! this is what i came to this website for. This is simple, not too much. it's innocent, quick short to the piont good write. keep going.
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      I can understand that... My friends always thought I was upset over something bad that my ex did... But it wasn't it was the good he did and why it made me feel the way it did... Anyway I liked.. Keep wrighting
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]

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