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    dots Submission Name: colorful pokadotsdots

    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 1267
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotscolorful pokadotsdots

    To Emerald City is where I'm wanting to go
    Look a catapillar with a nice bow
    Colorful pokadots fly all around
    Some square, triangle, and round
    Flying horses and flying pigs
    Oh look a leprechaun dances the jig

    Twirling, Twirling all around
    Lookie there a friend I've found
    He says his name is Thomas with a smile
    "Emerald City is that way, bout a mile"
    The city pears about the hill top
    I look and the beauty causes a sudden stop

    I knock on the door to let me in
    Then out comes a man made of tin
    He was slinky he was tall
    The tin man stood with a crystal ball
    He says "come in we've been waiting"
    So i stood there a moment contemplating

    I went into a big green room
    It was full of steamers and ballons
    They hollered "HAPPT BIRTHDAY" full of cheer
    But it wasn't my birthday this was clear
    I ate cake and opened preasents
    All that i recived was pleasent

    I stood there in the corner with fear
    Cause this wasn't my birthday they were celebrating here
    I felt light headed and began to shake
    I woke in my bedroom with a big birthday cake

    I don't know what happened or why
    It was then colorful pokadots began to fly

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      i like the beginning it really gets the reader into what you are talking about. it is really cute

    keep it up

    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this IS neat and nifty stuff---you have quite an aptitude for poetry ... most well and most ably done, I loved this poem a whole bunch ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of something from alice in wonderland, but maybe a little more trippy.
    I love the lines and how it flows

    "To Emerald City is where I'm wanting to go
    Look a catapillar with a nice bow"
    This frist line is the one that stands out in my mind the most, i know that it is kind of insignificant and really doesn't matter,
    but to let you know i had a similar experince to this.
    Nice write.
    Peace My Dear Friend.
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by WonderfulComa | [ Reply to This ]

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