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    dots Submission Name: Only you.dots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 764
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 748



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       Well.... I don't know what to say about this one.. It's more of an explination then a poem.. Anyway enjoy if there's anyway to fix it please tell me.


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    dotsOnly you.dots
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    I want to let you see.
    The invisble parts of me.

    These parts that I show no one.
    For fear of a reaction.

    I close my eyes, take a deep breathe.
    Then the words begin to flow.

    I tell you my secrets.
    Some of love and lost.

    Then the truth is at the surface.
    Allowing only you to see.

    I do not like the way I am.
    I hate the real me.

    I try and try to hide it.
    Never let it show through.

    But for some reason...
    I feel safe around only you.

    I've taken down my wall.
    I have allowed you to see.

    The simiple question is...
    Do you accept the real me?




    Submitted on 2007-05-10 11:29:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awesome poem, I have similar feelings all the time, I hate getting close to anyone, and when I do I'm really self-conscious of what they think of the "real" me.
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by Sir Fusting | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it's genius when people manage to write thoughts like these and make 'em rhyme... lol...

    Your words make me actually be able to feel that fear.
    That fear that a lot of us have, but don't admit, because fear, too, is something we hide.
    | Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by amrslamr | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so much how i feel! it's great with the truth of the write, and the emothion, along with the hidden meaning. great keep it up!
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      This would make great lyrics to a rock song.
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by itinnmannn | [ Reply to This ]
      The Real Me? Is it me or is the two line stanza just your thing. cool. I like it is easy to read simple to understand. there is not rhyme scheme, (which is usually what i like) but heck, reading this i don't even care whether it does or not. You write experiences of yourself and others around you, no? You seem to be similar to me in some ways. Are we related? jkjkjk
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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