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    dots Submission Name: expectations..dots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    & the torrential heart
    passion is the forgetful time in passing
    where we bleed
    everything drowns everything
    in drowning

    the piercing seeds of love
    that heed
    a holocaust of the inmost heart
    vivid attacks to the part of the brain
    that responds to the addictive qualities
    of you

    yet all i ever wanted
    was to be the one that
    despite all psychosis
    prevails in knowing
    the side of you that must be known

    Submitted on 2007-05-10 16:11:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the piercing seeds of love
    that heed
    a holocaust of the inmost heart
    vivid attacks to the part of the brain
    that responds to the addictive qualities
    of you

    that was just a wonderful part of your artistic techniques

    the title fit real good..

    and please. do not listen to this idiot "psyko" or don't even respond to him. lets just say he's bored with his life.

    | Posted on 2007-05-13 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      nice... when are you gonna make part two?

    this feels very unfinished but well written nonetheless
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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