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Three Words


Author: Roula
ASL Info:    18/female
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Three Words



Getting caught between emotions;
I didn't think it would go this far.
It was looking like a momentary promise.

Fate refused farewells.

Inspired by something beautiful.
He captivated me from the subtle start.
It might have been a dream.

Everyday seems a little clearer.

I was swept off my feet, the night I met him
I don't question it. Complex affections made me believe.
I gave him my heart, for what its worth.

An unstoppable momentum.

We became notably intertwined, yet I tried not to notice.
It became inevitable,
but I was the last one to know.

They were words that I could never say.





Submitted on 2007-05-10 19:51:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey hey, you've got some really good stuff in here ... "I was swept off my feet, the night I met him" seems to be lacking something though.
Shalom
oxo
| Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by flyfire | [ Reply to This ]
  oh yeah... and she's gotta point there too... that WAS a nice touch...
| Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this. It has a good display of emotion in a clear way. I liked how you did the 3 line then 1 line stanzas. That definatly set things apart and made it easy to read.

Love Always,
Delta Leah
| Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by maybe_tommorow | [ Reply to This ]
  you listen to a lot of emo [censored] huh?

this isn't something to be proud of, I will say that,,,

In fact... that's all I can say
| Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]


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