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    dots Submission Name: Three Wordsdots
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    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 948
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsThree Wordsdots
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    Getting caught between emotions;
    I didn't think it would go this far.
    It was looking like a momentary promise.

    Fate refused farewells.

    Inspired by something beautiful.
    He captivated me from the subtle start.
    It might have been a dream.

    Everyday seems a little clearer.

    I was swept off my feet, the night I met him
    I don't question it. Complex affections made me believe.
    I gave him my heart, for what its worth.

    An unstoppable momentum.

    We became notably intertwined, yet I tried not to notice.
    It became inevitable,
    but I was the last one to know.

    They were words that I could never say.





    Submitted on 2007-05-10 19:51:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey hey, you've got some really good stuff in here ... "I was swept off my feet, the night I met him" seems to be lacking something though.
    Shalom
    oxo
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by flyfire | [ Reply to This ]
      oh yeah... and she's gotta point there too... that WAS a nice touch...
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. It has a good display of emotion in a clear way. I liked how you did the 3 line then 1 line stanzas. That definatly set things apart and made it easy to read.

    Love Always,
    Delta Leah
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by maybe_tommorow | [ Reply to This ]
      you listen to a lot of emo [censored] huh?

    this isn't something to be proud of, I will say that,,,

    In fact... that's all I can say
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]


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