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    dots Submission Name: DREAM - a search for self-identity dots

    Author: flyfire
    ASL Info:    17, Female, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 33/19/14
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       hey hey, something i worte a little while ago ... enjoy.

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    dotsDREAM - a search for self-identity dots

    …and I’m running
    trying to find my garden
    within this damp building
    that allows no light
    from the candle in the sky
    to touch inside of its walls.
    Putting my hand on the stones
    I feel the slime in every crack
    slick under my tentative fingers.
    I round a corner and I see it,
    my garden glows yellow and gold,
    humming crystals of light hit my face
    and I am suddenly warm.
    The colours of my emotions surround me,
    huge fountains of water fall up
    into the sky to drown the sun
    and the stars go crazy.
    I look into a fountain and see myself
    … chasing a cat when I’m five,
    fingering my fathers woodwork tools, four,
    an orange’s juice running down my chin,
    three …
    I see all of my lost memories mirrored
    in the water of that garden
    before they’re sucked up into the sky
    and joined with the stars and
    I feel like I finally know
    who I am.

    Submitted on 2007-05-10 21:27:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very interesting write. There is something about it. I don't know what ... but I really like this. The imagery was very good. But ... and people do this a lot ... you need to remember that just because you push the enter key doesn't mean there is a pause. But other than punctuation, I think it's very good.
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by katieboo6 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very meaning full it mad me wonder "who am i?"but i liked your previous poem too
    keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by jamm | [ Reply to This ]

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