Description: hey hey, something i worte a little while ago ... enjoy.
DREAM - a search for self-identity -------------------------------------------
…and I’m running
trying to find my garden
within this damp building
that allows no light
from the candle in the sky
to touch inside of its walls.
Putting my hand on the stones
I feel the slime in every crack
slick under my tentative fingers.
I round a corner and I see it,
my garden glows yellow and gold,
humming crystals of light hit my face
and I am suddenly warm.
The colours of my emotions surround me,
huge fountains of water fall up
into the sky to drown the sun
and the stars go crazy.
I look into a fountain and see myself
… chasing a cat when I’m five,
fingering my fathers woodwork tools, four,
an orange’s juice running down my chin,
I see all of my lost memories mirrored
in the water of that garden
before they’re sucked up into the sky
and joined with the stars and
I feel like I finally know
who I am.
This is a very interesting write. There is something about it. I don't know what ... but I really like this. The imagery was very good. But ... and people do this a lot ... you need to remember that just because you push the enter key doesn't mean there is a pause. But other than punctuation, I think it's very good.