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1.99 $ doll

Author: caballero7137
ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123
Words: 107
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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1.99 $ doll

I’ll be your next victim,
Oh 1.99 $ doll!
Undress my skin of Life
till my anatomy
and my traumatize soul
can be sold separately
with proof of purchase.

I don’t care much
if I finish in a casket
or in a dusty shoebox.
Simply drain my flow
and let the ravens
nestle into my soul
as they plant seeds
that sprouts vast field
of mourner’s roses.

Oh 1.99 $ doll
set me free
and force me
to endure,
to suffer,
the pain
of a million lives
so I can finally know
what it means to live.

Submitted on 2007-05-10 22:20:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  is that your voodoo doll or blow up doll your talking about? hahaha

just [censored] with you... this was really good, and damn well written.

I really don't know what to say about it... beautiful control of your wording, and very nice flow.

| Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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