1.99 $ doll

Author: caballero7137 ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123 Words: 107

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1.99 $ doll

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I’ll be your next victim, Oh 1.99 $ doll! Undress my skin of Life till my anatomy and my traumatize soul can be sold separately with proof of purchase. I don’t care much if I finish in a casket or in a dusty shoebox. Simply drain my flow and let the ravens nestle into my soul as they plant seeds that sprouts vast field of mourner’s roses. Oh 1.99 $ doll set me free and force me to endure, to suffer, the pain of a million lives so I can finally know what it means to live.

Submitted on 2007-05-10 22:20:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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is that your voodoo doll or blow up doll your talking about? hahaha just [censored] with you... this was really good, and damn well written. I really don't know what to say about it... beautiful control of your wording, and very nice flow. Psyko

| Posted on 2007-05-10 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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