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Bells


Author: siradrian
Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 213 /123 /68
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Bells




The joyful pealing of the bells
seals our love with peace.

The silent bells remind us now
of love's but shortened lease.

Slow tolling bells give some release
as partner sinks beneath the ground.
No longer sound.







Submitted on 2007-05-11 02:12:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Man, this one just rings my bell, I kept trying to make sense of it, but then, you simply have pulled of something that is dark, vivid and nostalgia involved in such a fashion that you can mark remarkable meanings in to this..


Appreciate this work very much.

| Posted on 2007-05-20 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
  Short and sweet! I really like this poem it is short but so descriptive in those few lines!
No need for improvement here,

-aNNmARIE
| Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]


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