Jill, once I was able to pick up the beat of this piece it flowed along quite well. I must believe that there was some modicum of catharsis for you in the release you allowed yourself in penning this piece. I wonder though if it can ever be just one person's sole fault when a relationship hits the skids...I just wonder.
This pieces relates to alot in real life like 'Mac-[censored]-amen'. Real sweet... you got the expression just slapped nicely into - the pain and frustration that you can totally do without with. Its been a while since I've read something like this.. I haven't been looking around in Es much... >.>
Your words may not hav created the strongest sting you felt then, but its enough to weave the truth that its the other's fault. Good job.
hell ya! id give you a high five if possible but ill settle for a virtual one. yes it sucks to say the least that you have to go through this or anything that causes so much un-needed pain but that is the bite of reality. i like this piece because your getting out what you feel, which is therapeutic and your gaining perspective or at least it seems that way. so rock on and i wish you so much luck toward the future. woo.
i'm sorry to read you are having to go through this kind of pain.although your poem is written very well it has a heart wrenching feel.
it has a rage of a vent i'm glad you are leting it out of you because keeping it bottle up inside doesn't do your health any good.
i don't know what else to say other than i am sorry you are hurting so bad
i hope in time everything will work out for the best for you in the end take care jill